polo89900 发表于 2013-2-10 20:39   全显示 1楼
期待作者能把接下来的一幕大戏演好，其实这种贴近生活的文笔是最受欢迎的，我能预料到接下来肯定是高潮迭起，希望作者不要让我失望。一种阴谋的气息迷茫与文中。
我想提两点建议：1.肉戏的描写可以细致一些，这样正好与文章压抑的气氛对比。
2.排版要重排一下，这样看不仅很累，还影响读者感受
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